This is the first Chapter of More Deaths Than One, available from Indigo Sea Press. Click here buy from Amazon https://www.amazon.com/More-Deaths-Than-One-Bertram/dp/1630663719/
“What do you think of a guy who embezzles from his own business?”
Bob Stark recognized the voice of the graveyard shift waitress, the attractive one with the black hair. He glanced up from his contemplation of the scars on the laminated plastic table and saw her standing by his booth, gazing at him, her eyebrows quirked. She seemed to expect a response, but he had no idea what to say. And why would she ask him such a question? Though he’d been coming to Rimrock Coffee Shop for four weeks now, she’d never deviated from her standard lines of “What’ll you have?” and “Here you go.”
He took a surreptitious look around. Except for the two drunks arguing in a corner booth and a cook cleaning the grill in the kitchen, he and the waitress were the only two people in the twenty-four-hour coffee shop.
Beneath the overly long bangs, her dark eyes gleamed, giving him the impression of laughter. “Yes, I am talking to you.”
“I’ll have hot chocolate,” he said, adhering to the unwritten script.
With a flip of her wrist, she brushed the hair off her face. Her skirt flounced as she whirled away from the table, and Bob noticed that she had nicely muscled thighs. Good calves, too. Not wanting her to catch him staring, he picked up a newspaper someone had left behind and leafed through it.
The waitress returned with his beverage. “What would you do if you were a girl who just found out her boyfriend is embezzling from himself?”
Bob stirred his hot chocolate, trying to think of the right response, but nothing came to mind.
“Men!” she said, hurrying off to answer the ringing telephone.
Later, after the drunks had stumbled out into the night, she came back to Bob’s table carrying a cup of coffee for her and another cup of hot chocolate for him.
He raised his palms. “I didn’t order this.”
She sat across from him. “Let’s not quibble over details.” She sipped her coffee, eyes laughing at him over the rim of the cup, then she set the empty cup aside.
Folding her arms on the table, she leaned forward and stared into his face. “What do you have to say for yourself? And who are you? You’ve been coming in here every night, real late, and you never talk except to order hot chocolate.”
She leaned back. “I bet you can’t sleep. That’s why you come, isn’t it? What’s the problem? Bad dreams?”
Bob felt a shudder go through him. He came here to get away from the nightmares, not remember them. He took a gulp of chocolate, grateful for the warmth sliding down his throat.
“You’re a shy one,” she said. “And you never did answer my question.”
He lifted one shoulder in a disinterested shrug. “You asked a lot of questions.”
“The one about the girl finding out that her boyfriend is embezzling from himself.”
“Depends on their relationship. Is she involved in the business?”
“She helped him start it, works in the office during the day, and waits tables at night to pay the rent.”
“Then he’s embezzling from her, too.”
She flicked the hair out of her eyes. “You’re right. God, what a fool I’ve been. Ever since I found out he’s been cheating on his business, I’ve been wondering if he’s been cheating on me. That son of a rabid dog. He promised we’d get a house together as soon as the business did well enough, and it turns out we could have been living in our own place for several months now.”
“Even if he’s not cheating on you physically,” Bob said, “he’s cheated on you morally.”
“I want someone who’s honest and true to himself, someone who likes and respects himself so he can like and respect me. Is that too much to ask?”
The door opened. A young couple entered. Mouths locked together, they slid into a booth and groped beneath each other’s clothes.
The waitress stood. “I better go remind them this isn’t a motel.”
Grateful to be alone, Bob sipped his hot chocolate and read the newspaper.
The Broncos still reeled from their humiliation at the previous Super Bowl, having lost to the Redskins forty-two to ten.
Two youths found a man’s decomposing body in a culvert off the South Platte River. The man had been tortured; the work of a gang, the police surmised.
Silverado faced insolvency, having squandered one hundred million dollars on bad loans.
And Lydia Loretta Stark was dead. Again.
“I brought you another hot chocolate. It’s on the house.” The young woman sat and peered at Bob. “Is something wrong? You don’t look so good all of a sudden.”
He tried to ignore the ache inching up the back of his head. “What would you do if you were reading today’s paper and came across the obituary of your mother who’s been buried for twenty-two years?”
She laughed. “Go to the funeral, of course.” She must have realized Bob hadn’t meant to be funny, because the mirth faded from her eyes. “You’re serious?”
“Dead serious.” He showed her the notice.
She read it aloud. ” ‘Lydia Loretta Stark, sixty-six, of Denver, passed away August twenty-ninth, nineteen eighty-eight, at four p.m. Preceded in death by husband Edward Jackson. Survived by sons Edward Jackson, Junior and Robert; six grandchildren. Services and interment Friday, ten a.m., at Mountain View Cemetery.’ ” She looked at him. “Are you Edward or Robert?”
“Robert. My brother is Edward, but he goes by the name of Jackson.”
“What name do you go by?”
“I’m Kerry. Kerry Casillas.” She eyed the obituary. “How many of those children are yours?
Bob massaged the back of his neck. “None.”
“Jackson’s been a busy boy.”
“Seems like it.”
“You don’t know?”
“I haven’t seen him since my mother’s funeral-the first one, I mean. We never got along.”
She pushed back her hair. “So this is really your mother’s obituary?”
“Could be. She died in nineteen sixty-six at the age of forty-four and had no grandchildren at the time, but everything else matches.”
“If it’s not a coincidence, it must be a hoax.”
Bob shook his head, stopping abruptly when pain shot to the top of his skull. “Why would anyone go through all the trouble of putting a fake obituary in the paper? And who’s being hoaxed? It can’t be me. No one knows I’m in Denver.”
On Friday, Bob made the trip to Mountain View Cemetery. He wandered around the lush expanse, skirting formal flower gardens and stepping over white gravestones lying flush with the ground. The place seemed deserted, but as he topped a small rise, he saw a funeral party spread out before him like a stage play.
He paused beside a large clump of lilac bushes and scanned the small crowd encircling the brass-trimmed casket.
Everyone wore black except one young woman, scarcely out of her teens, who had pasted on a skimpy red dress that left no part of her voluptuous figure to the imagination. A much older man had an arm draped around her, his hand cupping her buttocks.
Bob recognized the man: his brother. Jackson had been a good-looking boy, having inherited his father’s athletic build and his mother’s blond beauty. He still looked good, though Bob could see that too many years of hard living or hard drinking had left their mark.
Bob’s headache returned in full force. He closed his eyes and massaged his temples while breathing deeply. When the pain abated, he glanced at the crowd again and noticed two men with the tensed posture of police officers on duty standing off to one side. They seemed familiar, but he couldn’t place them. As if becoming aware of his scrutiny, they turned in his direction.
He stepped closer to the lilac bush, out of their line of vision.
Clustered with their backs to him stood a man, a woman, and six children ranging in age from about two years old to about sixteen. The obituary had mentioned six grandchildren, Bob recalled. Were these six his brother’s offspring, by an ex-wife, perhaps?
One of the children, a pudgy little boy, reached out and yanked the pigtails of the taller, skinnier girl slouching next to him. She slapped him. The next moment they were rolling around on the ground and pummeling each other.
The woman turned around. “Stop it, you two.”
Bob sucked in his breath. Lorena Jones, his college girlfriend? What was she doing here? How did she know these people? He certainly hadn’t introduced her to them.
Feeling dizzy, he studied her while she scolded the children. Deep lines and red splotches marred her once satiny smooth face, and her body appeared bloated, as if she had not bothered to lose the extra weight from her last pregnancy or two. Despite those changes, she looked remarkably like her college picture he still carried in his wallet along with the Dear John letter that had ended their relationship.
Lorena nudged the man next to her. “Robert Stark, don’t just stand there. Do something.”
The man she called Robert Stark turned around to admonish the children.
Bob stared. The other Robert Stark seemed to have aged a bit faster than he, seemed more used, but the resemblance could not be denied. He was looking at himself.
Head aching so much he could scarcely breathe, he stood like stone. Not even his eyes moved as he watched the rest of the ceremony.
When everyone left, he approached the casket. He gazed at it, then turned to walk away. A flash of white caught his attention-the headstone, lying discreetly off to the side, ready to be inset: Lydia Loretta Stark, cherished wife, beloved mother; adored grandmother; born March 10, 1922; died August 29, 1988.
“What the hell is going on?” he asked aloud.
The mild expletive hung in the air until a sudden breeze blew it away.
March 31, 2009 at 12:37 am
Excellent hooker! Fast paced and easy read. (The words disappear after you read them.)
April 11, 2009 at 9:10 pm
Love the hook! Left me wanting more.
September 27, 2009 at 3:08 pm
February 6, 2010 at 11:43 pm
As a long time Science Fiction reader, my first thought is “well, parallel time-tracks, of course”. And then I’d go looking for the point of divergence. But this is mainstream fiction which normally doesn’t have such things. Curiouser and curiouser…
February 7, 2010 at 12:07 pm
Steve, you can read the first 30% free on Smashwords: http://www.smashwords.com/books/view/1773. Maybe you can figure out the story from that.
February 8, 2010 at 2:43 am
Unfortunately my circumstances don’t allow me to purchase the book at this time. 😦 But based on the first 73 pages, here are some guesses, along with unanswered questions.
(1) MK-Ultra was never disbanded – merely privatized. ISI is the most recent incarnation. The two heavies and Robert “creep” Dunbar work for or with the MK-ISI complex.
(2) Bob is not Robert Stark. The real and only Robert Stark is the one with the limp.
(But why Lorena’s Dear John letter? Faked? Along with the other contents of the wallet?)
(3) Dr. Albion discovered some or all of the truth and was killed to silence him.
(4) The Gold Buddah is misdirection
(5) Bob has memories belonging to Robert Stark. Some more clear than others. Some interestingly fuzzy. He remembers Robert Stark’s father as “Edward”, not as “Father” or “Dad”.
(6) Bob has specialized training in unconventional combat. Commando? Assassin?
(7) Bob is the victim of false memories, but the extent and technology used are unclear. Implant? (but no nosebleed). Experimental partial brain transplant from Robert? Old-Style visual frame programming?
A sufficiently advanced technology, indistinguishable from magic? 🙂
(8) Who got hit by the land mine, Bob? Robert? Both? Neither?
(9) What of Thailand? How much of that was real?
(10) Who is bob. Where are *his* childhood memories?
All for now,
February 8, 2010 at 5:04 pm
Steve, interesting observations! So as not to spoil the book, I cannot comment on which, if any, of your guesses are true, but I am delighted that you put so much effort into your analysis.
September 18, 2010 at 4:43 pm
Fabulous read. I want more. Heading to smashwords.com to catch the rest.
Beautifully written Pat. My kind of read.
October 8, 2012 at 5:19 am
Interesting and provocative hook. The waitress as initiator, I mean, enables the Bob character to return her gesture in like fashion when he finally has something to say. And then, before the results of that hook are quite over, the next hook comes along, the obituary, and then the next hook, the sight of “himself” at the funeral. I know, it’s not true perhaps that all of these things are hooks. But it’s very nice the way each thing dovetails into the next.
October 8, 2012 at 9:34 pm
Yes, they were all hooks! Books on writing always say to start with a hook, but if you give the biggest hook at the beginning, there’s not much left to capture reader’s imaginations. I try to build a series of hooks all the way through the book. Too many novels coast in the middle as the author tries to pack in the back story and set up the ending.
March 11, 2013 at 4:34 pm
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January 14, 2014 at 4:10 pm
This was extremely well-written. Intricate study into writing style for fiction has been a long-standing hobby for me and this first chapter was masterful. I’ve said it before and I will say it again, Pat, you write really well.
January 14, 2014 at 4:33 pm
Thank you, Stephen. Such balm to my writing spirit.
January 3, 2015 at 2:07 pm
You have got me hooked. Should no thave read the 1st Chapter, now I need to get the book.
January 3, 2015 at 6:59 pm
Yep! That’s the point of posting the first chapter!